well, i’m new guy here. are my sentences at this bellow right?
 I’m just ordinary man
from ordinary family
but I know
I have to become more than ordinary
for my country
for my religion
at least for who giving me birth
thanks, before
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Author profile : I'm just ordinary man
from ordinary family
but I know
I have to become more than ordinary
for my country
for my religion
at least for who giving me birth
Tags: Short story
6 comments
masykurhz
October 4, 2011
let me joint you, Mr. bhaskara
Swara Bhaskara
October 5, 2011
We’re all glad to know that you’ve joined us.
Swara Bhaskara
October 5, 2011
Hi Guntur,
Good writing but there are some missing articles, punctuation problems, and unclear meanings. The balded words below are my suggestions.
guntur
October 6, 2011
Thank very much sir. hehehe, so all this time i wrote wrong sentences.
shakila
December 13, 2011
Om Bhaskara, bisa gak kalo yang “who giving me birth” itu jadi :
who gives a birth to me ?? Â
Swara Bhaskara
December 13, 2011
Yes, we can, especially if we want to express present general facts. But, if the pronoun “who” modifies our mother (in Guntur’s, “who” modifies “someone” and what he means by “someone” here is his mother), then the adjective clause should be in the simple past tense.
who gave birth to me.