Abstract for a paper

Abstrak merupakan ringkasan tulisan dari tulisan yang lebih besar dan umumnya diperlukan ketika kita menulis sebuah laporan ilmiah atau hasil riset. Karena merupakan ringkasan atau tulisan dalam bentuk mini, abstrak ini dibatasi dalam jumlah kata, misalnya tidak lebih dari 250 kata, 180 kata dan sebagainya. Nah ini sebuah abstrak yang coba saya susun dari sebuah laporan.

In order to provide an easy way to develop Wireless Sensor Network (WSN) applications, current proposals apply abstraction mechanisms of software engineering to hide complexities and implementation details of WSN. However, most of them are focused on implementation issues and platform-dependent solution, thus resulting designs are difficult to be reused. Moreover, these proposals do not provide a way how to specify a network architecture for application and how to control task allocation for each node or a group of node. This study addresses these issues and proposes a new high-level of abstraction model based on Domain Specific Modeling (DSM) which enables developers to build WSN applications using logical and physical abstraction model, task allocation as well as automation via code generation. Evaluation results on a case study indicate that the use of proposed model is capable to increase productivity in development time about 6 times than manual approach. While evaluation of quality of generated codes in simulation environment shows the effectiveness of processing task in our case study, average calculation at intermediate nodes can reduce the cost of communication significantly.

Evaluasi sudah dilakukan, apakah tidak sebaiknya saya menggunakan bentuk past, atau tetap dalam bentuk present, karena seperti halnya suatu ketetapan/rumus yang sudah baku. Seperti dibagian akhir berikut:

Evaluation results on a case study `indicated` that the `used` of proposed model `was` capable to….. While evaluation ….. in simulation environment `showed` the effectiveness ……

Friends, I need some corrections or suggestions of you to improve the abstract. ^__^

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Swara Bhaskara

October 17, 2011

Hi FJR,

What a great abstract. The following are just a few that I could suggest.

However, most of them are focused on …? Here, the pronoun them has unclear antecedent.
Moreover, these proposals do not provide a way of how to specify a network architecture for….
… thus the resulting designs are difficult to be reused.
.. or a group of nodes.
Evaluation results on a case study indicated that the use of the proposed model was capable of increasing productivity in development time about 6 times as fast as that of the manual approach.
While evaluation of quality of the generated codes in simulation environment showed the effectiveness of processing task in our case study, the average calculation at intermediate nodes could reduce the cost of communication significantly.

And, as in suggestion 5 and 6, I agree with you that research findings should be expressed in the simple past tense. My professor once told me so, too.

fjr

October 17, 2011

Thanks a lot for your response Sir,
pronoun them refers to `current proposals`. I just avoid to rewrite the word, because it will be used in next sentence : Moreover these proposals…..
How if I write like this,
Most of these proposals …….. Moreover they do not provide…..

Sorry for my poor English Sir, I hope, I can find a way to improve it soon ^___^